作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
A busy day Sam got up at 6.00 a.m. yesterday. Then riding a bike to the park he got a lot of fun. He was taken by his parents to McDonald`s for lunch.From 4.00p.m. in the afternoon,he had been playing basketball at school with whom in his class until 6.00p.m..After dinner,his father bought him a classical music CD when they went for a walk.What a funny day Sam spent it was!