作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
A busy day In the morning,Sam waked up at 6.00 a.m.yesterday.Then he rode a bicycle to the park that he got a lot of fun.At noon,he was taken by his parents to McDonald`s for lunch.In the afternoon,he had been playing basketball at school with whom in his class from 4.00p.m.until 6.00p.m..After dinner,his father bought him a classical music CD when they went for a walk.What a funny day Sam spent it was!