简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;文中词汇丰富度不足,拼写检查也要重视;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Today is my holiday, my family will go to the zoo. It's sunny and warm. We get up early. After we get up, we have breakfast. Then we are on the way to the zoo at 8 o'clock. When we have arrived the zoo, a crowd of people is out of the gate. We have bought three tickets. When we have entered the zoo, we see lots of birds on the ground. We visit many animals, such as monkeys, birds, gooses, ducks, tigars and bears in the morning. At noon, we have lunch at the reastaunant of the zoo. After we have lunch, we visit snakes, lions and elephants. At last, we have visited panda. Panda is very lovely. When we visit them, them are sleeping. When we go home, it's dark. All of us are very tired but we are very happy.