简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Today is my holiday, my family will go to the zoo. It's sunny and warm. We get up early. After we get up, we have breakfast. Then we are on the way to the zoo at 8 o'clock. When we have arrived at the zoo, a crowd of people is out of the gate. We have bought three tickets. When we have entered the zoo, we see lots of birds on the ground. We visit many animals, such as monkeys, birds, geese, ducks, tigers and bears in the morning. At noon, we have lunch at the restaunant of the zoo. After we have lunch, we visit the snakes, lions and elephants. At last, we have visited panda. Panda is very lovely. When we visit them, they are sleeping. When we go home, it's dark. All of us are very tired but we are very happy.