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Last October, my father, mother and I went to Singapore. We departured on Oct 12, and returned on Oct 16. This is my fist trip, so I'm very excting. We arrived at Beijing Capital International Airport very early. At the airport, I had seen lofs of plane. I would take one that is a very large. After we are landing, we passed the custom. We lived in very beautiful hotel. The second day, we visited zoo, river safari and night safari. We found many strange animals. At last day, we went to universal studio. We see a perfect play that is named Future Water World. Then we had taken cable out of the studio. During my trip, my father had taken lots of photo. The trip bring me some wounderful memories.