正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;过渡词和衔接词不饱和,文章行文较为流畅。
Jim is my friend. Look at the picture of his family. His father is a doctor who works in a big hospital. So he is very busy with his job. And his mother is an English teacher in a middle school. She loves her job very much and loves her students as her own children. The young girl is Jim's little sister. She is so cute. This is Jim's family.