句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;作者词汇表达不够丰富,同时请仔细检查词汇的拼写;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday norning, after that, he rode his bike went to park. he has a good time in the park. at noon, he lunch with his parents in McDonald's. in the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmate from four o'clock till six. after dinner Sam went for a walk togerther with his father, his father bought a classical music CD for his. it is a funny day..