文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;文中的过程性词汇不足。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he took a bike to the park where having a good time. At afternoon, he had lunch with his parents in McDonald’s, after the lunch, he went to play basketball with his classmates in school from 4 pm till 6 pm. After having dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father, during which his father bought him a classical music CD. What an interesting day Sam had yesterday!