文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;作者应适量增加从句的使用量;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning .after that ,he rode his bike to go to park,he had great fun playing in the park.at noon,he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents .in the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates in school from 16:00 pm till 18:00 pm ,after dinner ,Sam went for a walk with his father to bought a classical music CD ,Sam had too much fun on that day !