文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning.After that,he went to the park by bike and had great fun playing in the park.At noon,he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates in school from 16:00pm till 18:00 pm.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father together,and his father bought a classical music CD for him.Sam had great day!