句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词。
What a great day Sam had! Yesterday morning Sam got up at six o'clock. Then he went to the park by bike and played very happy in the park. At noon, he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents and told his parents he had invited his classmates to play basketball from 16:00pm till 18:00pm in the afternoon. His parents had been waiting for him to have dinner when Sam arrived at home. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father together at the pedestrian street where his father bought a classical music CD for him. For that, that's a pleasant day!