作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;衔接词较为不错,但文章结构不严谨。
What a great day Sam had! Yesterday morning Sam got up at six o'clock. Then he rode a bike to go to the park and enjoyed a pleasant journey in the park. At noon when his parents had lunch at McDonald's with Sam who told his parents he had invited his classmates to play basketball from 16:00pm till 18:00pm in the afternoon. His parents had been waiting for him to have dinner when Sam arrived at home. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father together at the pedestrian street where his father bought a classical music CD for him. For that, he spent a happy day.