文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;衔接词较为不错,但文章结构不严谨。
What a great day Sam had! After Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning. He went to the park by a bike, enjoying a pleasant journey in the park. At noon when his parents had lunch at McDonald's with Sam who told his parents he had invited his classmates to play basketball from 16:00pm till 18:00pm in the afternoon. His parents had been waiting for him to have dinner when Sam arrived at home. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father together at the pedestrian street, where his father bought a classical music CD for him. For that, he spent a happy day.