作者词汇表达较为熟练,高级词汇使用不是很多;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词。
What a great day Sam had! After Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning. He went to the park by a bike, enjoying a pleasant journey in the park. At noon when his parents take Sam to have lunch at McDonald's, during their eating, Sam told his parents he had invited his classmates to play basketball from 16:00pm till 18:00pm in the afternoon. His parents had been waiting for him to have dinner when Sam arrived at home. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father together at the pedestrian street, where his father bought a classical music CD for him. For that, he spent a happy day.