结构良好,但是语言不流畅;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,对拼写检查也要重视;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
My best friend is Kelly.she is 15 years old,she is a girl , she likes playing computer,reading book, planting and drawing.She bored with playing basketball or football.She is a pleasant girl,she is very friendly and she is kind to others so she always makes a good impression on her friend.My frist impression of her was favourable .she is a good girl, is she.