从句使用不熟练;文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
The interesting day What an interesting day for Sam. Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday morning, and then he went to the park by bike, he felt very funny at the park. Sam had a lunch with his parents in McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmates played basketball from 4pm till 6pm. Sam went for a walk after dinner with his father who bought a clasic CD to Sam. So Sam felt very happy. It was an enjoyable day for Sam.