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Sam got up at yesterday six o'clock .After that he rode bicycle to the park. How a great fun .At noon,he had lunch at McDonald with parents. Then afternoon Sam playing basketball from 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock with classmate at school. After dinner ,He went for a walk with farther and his farther brought a classical music CD for him .How a great day he had .