单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Hello,my name is Lucy King. I from UK and my mother language is English.I love sports,music and movies.I love China and want to know more about China,so want to make friends from China .The best things you also has some hobbies as me ,I also want to learn Chinese from you.