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Today, with the development of electronic instruments, more and more person have eyes sickness. We realize it's very important to protect our eyes. Nonetheless we how to do it? First, we must keep eye relaxing a minutes during watching something longtime. Second, we can do eyes protective sports. At last, we can get news by reading paper or listening radio instead of wathing electronic display. It's benefit to our health if we could go out to beautiful nature in weekend. Another thing, we can eat some nutrition food which is good for our eyes. Let's start protecting our eyes from now on.