文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;文中从句数量过少;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at six o'clock in yesterday morning.Then he went to the park by bike, he had a great fun in the park.At noon, sam went to McDonld's has lunch with his parents.In the afternoon, sam with his pupils played basketball,from 4 till 6 o'clock .After dinner,sam went for a walk with his dad,his dad bought him a classical CD. What a happy day did sam have!