文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;文中从句数量过少;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning. Then he went to the park by bike, he had a great fun in the park. At noon,sam had lunch in McDonld's with his parents. In the afternoon. Sam played basketball from 4p.m. till 6p.m. with his pupils. After dinner, sam went for a walk with his dad and his dad bought him a classical CD. What a happy day did sam have!