单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;句法知识较好,但需加强句式变化;语言不流畅;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday morning.after that ,he rode his bike to the park, he had fun playing in the park .in noon ,he had lunch with his parents.afternoon he with his classmate play basketball for 4:00 to 6:00 in school .after dinner,he with father went for a walk ,father bought a CD for he .what a happy day Sam had.