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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,then he rid his bike to the park ,he was very happy. He has lunch in McDonald's with his parents.Afternoon he played basketball in school with his classmates ,from 4pm to 6pm.After supper,Sam and his father go for a walk,His father buyed a classmic CD for him. Sam had a intersting day!