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yestday ,Sam got up at six a'colock and then went to the part by bike,and palyed fun.At noon,he eated lunch with his parends.At afternoon,Sam and his classmates played basketball from 16:00p.m. till 18:p.m. at school. After the dinner,Sam and father went for a walk together .what's more ,father buy a classicl miusc of CD for Sam.what a interesting this day his though!