若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike, and had a good time there. For lunch, he had it in MCDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates in school from 4:00 pm till 6:00 pm. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought him an antient music CD. How interesting it is the day.