若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike, and had good time there. For lunch, he had it in MCDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates in school from 4:00 pm till 6:00 pm. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought him an antient music CD. How interesting it is the day.