作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam got up at six yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike, and had a good time there. For lunch, he had it in MCDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates in school from 4:00 pm till 6:00 pm. After dinner , Sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought him a classic CD. What a happy day Sam had.