作者词汇量偏少,不过单词拼写方面做的不错;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock, after that , he rode his bike to the park, he had great fun playing in the park. At noon,he had lunch in Mcdonals wih this parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from 4 to 6 with this classmates. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with this father,his father brought a classical CD for him .He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had.