小学三年级英语作文:When I grow up

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When I grow up, I hope to become a doctor. Beacause the doctor can save life who have been ill. Now many people is dead for some strange illness. Face to these illness, the doctors do not look for any good solutions. When I grow up, I will become a famours doctor. I will invent some medicine. This medicine will be used to patients. Then they weill be health. The people can be very health more and more, because they will do not ill.