小学三年级英语作文:When I grow up

文中词汇表达贫乏，但是单词拼写做的不错；行文较为流畅，作者文中过渡词使用的不错；若增加一些长难句的使用，文章会更好。

When I grow up, I hope to become a doctor. Because the doctor can save life who has been ill. Now many person are dead for some strange illnesses. Face to these illness, the doctors do not look for any good solutions. When I grow up, I will become a famous doctor. I will invent some medicine. This medicine will be used to patients. Then they weill be healthy. The people can be more healthy , because they will do not ill.