若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累高级词汇,拼写错误也要注意;全文结构不够严谨,文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词。
Hello, I'm Sam. What a funny day yesterday is. I'll tell you how I lived yesterday. Yesterday morning i got up at six, then I went to park by bike and I enjoyed the time in the garden. At midday, together with my parents, we had lunch in McDonald's. I liked the food very much, impressed by the delicacy. In the afternoon, from 4 to 6 pm all the time, together with some classmates, I played bascketball in the school. After supper, my father and I went for a walk. During the period, my father buyed me a classical CD. How happy yesterday I was.