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Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike in the park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmates. It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy， because he appreciate music very much. What a happy day Sam had!
