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Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike in the park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball two hours with his classmates. It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classic CD for him. He was very happy， because he appreciate music very much. What a happy day Sam had!
