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My favorite sport My favorite hobby is playing football, but I fell in love with it by chance. It was on my way home I picked up a football, after that, I often played the football with my friends, I had a lot of fun in it, the more I played it, the more I like it. I often had training or competition with classmates. My favorite football star is David Beckham from England, I like his performance in the field like a hero. My dream is that will be a professional football player, so I am fighting for my dream all the time.