文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;文中从句的数量太少;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Sam gated up at six o 'clock yesterday.Then go to the park by bike, he had a good time in the park.Noon and parents eat lunch at McDonald's (' s).Sam and his classmates in the school play basketball in the afternoon, play from 4 PM until (till) at six o 'clock in the afternoon.Take a walk after dinner, Sam and his father (go for a walk), his father bought him a piece of classical music CDS.This day Sam had how interesting!