文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;文中从句数量过少;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam gets up at six o 'clock yesterday.Then go to the park by bike, he had a good time in the park.Noon and parents eat lunch at McDonald's.Sam and his classmates in the school play basketball in the afternoon, from 4 PM to 6 PM.After dinner, Sam and his father walk together, his father bought him a piece of classical music CDS.This day Sam had how interesting!