文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累。
I had a dream of Alice yesterday. She is a beautiful girl. She take me to the Wonderland. There are a lot of flowers. They can speak. Many little animals fly in the sky. I try my best to fly, but I failed. Alice give me a special silver coat, I put on it. I can fly as high as them. I am exciting! Suddenly, I dropped in the land . I am crying! I woke up in the end , and it was a dream.