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Our Monitor My monitor is a girl. Her name is Xumeng. We are good friends. Shi is 12 years old. I think she is very nice. First,she has a big eye.Second,she has e small mouth.Her hiar is biack and long.She like in a pink cloths. My teacher like she is very much.Me,too.