正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
My father is a teacher. He is very busy. He has taught lot of person. Some of them have made great achievement. So I am proud of my father. My father always gets up very early from Monday to Friday. Then he goes out and exercises. After he had breakfast at home, he went to school. Sometime he went home very late, because he taught some students who were poor performance. When they had made progress, he was excited. Some students thanked to his help. After my father went home, he corrected homework till night. I like my father.