正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. After that, he rode bike to park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had a lunch at MC'Donald's with his parents. At afternoon, he played basketball from four to six with his classmate. He is relaxing. After dinner, he got for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD to him.What a happy day his had!