作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,学术词汇使用过少;能够使用一些不错的从句;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
Today,country's economy is developing and communicate more and more frequently,so it is very necessary that we should make our behavior more gentlemanly. I found that many bad behavior in China.For example,in China,many people spit on the ground and many people go for a walk with their dog who bark when others sleeping.In my opinion,we should learn from foreign, and don't just think myself .