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Today,country's economy is developing and communicate more and more frequently,so it is very necessary that we should make our behavior more gentlemanly. I found that many people have bad behavior in China.For example,in China,many people spit on the ground and many people go for a walk with their dog who bark when others sleeping.In my opinion,we should learn from foreign and shuldn't just think ourselves.