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I have a friend called Sam.He told me that he had an interesting day. Yesterday,Sam got up at 6:00 and rode a bike to the park.He had such a great time there.After that,he went to the McDonald’s tohave lunch with his parents.The food there was very delicious and the waiters was really gentle.And that was it,Sam rode to the school to play basketball withhis classmates.He arrived there at 4:00.They played basketball till to 6:00.But Sam didn't feel tired.He thought it was so much fun.After dinner,his father went for a walk with Sam and Sam got a lovely surprise------his father bought an old music CD for him.Sam was so exciting that he couldn't speak any more. Sam and I both think it's an interesting day.What about you?