句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,注意文中少数拼写错误;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday.Then he rode bike went to the park and he is very happy.At the afternoon he ate the lunch with his parents at Mcdonald's.At the evening Sam played basketball with his clasmates at school from 4 pm to 6 pm. Sam went for a walk with his father after the dinner,and his father bought a classic music CD for him .what a fun day .