文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用,注意文中的几处句子错误;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
hello everyone My name is Lucy King ,I am from the UK,and I am 13 years old .I love China and hope find a friend who is girl in China to learn about Chinese culture and history.My hobbies are play tennis ,love listen music and watch movies, I think we would better have same hobbies so that we can talk better.i hope she can teach me Chinese.