文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam was got up at 6 o'clock.and then went to park by bike. he had good time enjoying himself.in the afternoon,his father and he were had lunch in the McDonald's.after that,he with his classmates played basketball in the school during 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock.afer dinner,they were went for a walk and his father bought a CD to him.What a funny day!