文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;文中从句过少;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
I have a good friend, his name is Tom. We are classmate, at the primary school. Tom is tall, his hair is yellow, and his eyes are blue. By the way, he big me three days. We enjoy the basketball, but he played better than me. I want to with him forever is a place of good brother.