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Dear all, My first name is Lucy ,last name is King.I am 13-year-old girl who is come from UK.My mather language is Englisn,and I have many differnt hobbits.such as aports,music,movies.Now,I want to make a Chinese friend who have the same as hobie with me.in addition to this,I also willing to learn Chinese to her.