文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨;文中句子偏简单,可增加从句使用量。
Dear all, My first name is Lucy,last name is King.I am 13-year-old girl who is from UK.My mother language is Englisn,and I have many different hobbies.Such as sports,music,movies.Now,I want to make a Chinese friend who have the same as hobbites with me.In addition to this,I also willing to learn Chinese to her.