作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;文中从句数量过少;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam got up at yesterday 6 o'clock .Then went to park by bike, he had a good time at park. His family had lunch at Mcdonald's. He played basketball with his classmate at afternoon 4 o'clock until 6. After dinner ,Sam went for a walk with his father, Father gave him a classic music CD.what an interesting day